She was on her way back to town when the call came in, her fingers slackened and the phone slipped, falling on the cobblestones with a thud, but she just couldn’t bend to pick it up as she stood rooted to the spot, her legs too heavy laden to move forward.
Staring unseeingly into the distance, tears filled Ellen’s eyes and brimmed over with a silent scream that tore through her head and her heart shattered in tiny bits.
She always knew that this day was coming, yet she wasn’t braced for it.
That single dreaded call, that she had prayed never to receive finally came.
……And the man died! Head bowed in deep grief, her knees buckled as she sank into bone-wracking wailing; like a wild animal, Ellen’s cry was not a pretty sight. She cried with all her being, but everyone who knew her understood why.
© Jacqueline Oby-Ikocha
Exciting fast pace and tells a lot in just a few lines. The loop is intense and effective. Good work, Jaqueline!
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What a speedy tale not short of emotional power. The image complemented the heart wrenching story. Great job, Jacq!
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Have a lovely weekend Rosema and a good thank you 🙂
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Thank you, Jacq! Itbis my pleasure. 🙂
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Emotive.
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Thanks lady Violet.
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She cried with all her being, but everyone who knew her understood why.~ this is so heartbreaking. Beautiful poignant piece, Jacq!
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Thank you Maria 🙂
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You’re most welcome, Jacq… 🙂
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Emotional intense filled. Great Post!
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Thank you babe’s.
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Wow! Short, quick but so powerful emotionally. Great job!
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Thank you my lady 🙂
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Another great and powerful story…well done Jackie!
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Thanks sis 🙂
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Short post but full with strong emotions!!
I hope none of us will receive such call.
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I hope so too *though I have received such call….when my father died!* So I think Ellen must be me.
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Powerful! I literally felt her pain and anguish
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Thank you Kay 🙂
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as did I! Poor Ellen…
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Thanks Melinda 🙂
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you’re welcome 🙂
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Powerfully intense writing, Jacqueline. It’s a bit to soon and too close to home for me to actually like, but I know you understand.
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Oh! I know how you feel. I understand. This actually depicts my experience when I received the call of my dad’s passing two years ago.
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What doesn’t kill us makes us stronger, my dear Sister Jacqueline. ❤ ❤ ❤
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True indeed.
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Roo I don’t know what’s going on, but every time that I click on your blog, it sends me here and I know that this is not your blog https://whatsnext.wordpress.com/
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This leave me wondering…who/what killed this man?
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He died from natural causes.
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Beautifully written story. You can feel her pain.
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Thank you my dear.
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🙂 You’re welcome
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